Redemptor

12/29/2012

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I pray you will indulge me for a second posting today.  I have long wanted to write a poem that offers a counterpoint to the famous Invictus, by William Earnest Henley.  While Henley did not necessarily intend for the poem to be taken as a rejection of God, unfortunately, anyone reading it would have to come to that conclusion.  The reader can see self-reliance in the poem, but the poem goes a step further into a naturalistic or humanistic world-view that does not include God, which is, of course, a foolish path in this difficult life.  I have posted Invictus below and my answer to his poem beneath that. 

Invictus
by William Earnest Henley
, 1875

Out of the night that covers me,
Black as the pit from pole to pole,
I thank whatever gods may be
For my unconquerable soul.

In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced nor cried aloud.
Under the bludgeonings of chance
My head is bloody, but unbowed.

Beyond this place of wrath and tears
Looms but the Horror of the shade,
And yet the menace of the years
Finds and shall find me unafraid.

It matters not how strait the gate,
How charged with punishments the scroll.
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.



Redemptor
by Del Chambers, 2012
© 

Out of the light that illuminates,
The pitch-black sin that stains my soul,
I thank the one, eternal God,
For saving my wretched, wounded soul.

In life’s brutal circumstance,
I have often wept and cried aloud.
Under the rain of life’s harsh blows,
My only solace, in prayer, head bowed.

Beyond the suffering of this bleak life,
Lies my punishment or reward.
For I shall be charged to give account,
For all my deeds, to a righteous Lord.

It ever matters how strait the walk,
That we all purpose to our way;
But in the end, our deeds fall short;
By Jesus, only, may we be saved.

 


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08/04/2017 2:09am

This poem entitled "Invictus" written by William Earnest Henley has left a big trademark in the world of poems. It's still one of the most iconic poems I've read and will always be one of the best pieces written by Henley. By the way, your answer through a poem form was also on point. You have provided a good answer with a substantial message. You are also a good poet. I hope you'll keep on writing good poems!

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    I'm a retired soldier, having spent 23 years of my life serving our country, actually 30 years when you count the reserve and National Guard time as well.  I believe in servant leaders, following the example of our Lord, and I believe in giving back to the troops once one has attained a certain status or level of success in life.  But I also believe in fighting back against corruption and incompetence wherever you find it if it hurts people.  Our national values were worth dying for.  They are also worth living for.  A man or woman can actually live a life by these principles of humility, service, love, duty, and honor, and have a significant impact on the world around them...if you have the dedication to see it through. 

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